Wednesday, 21 May 2014

My recount

W.A.L.T:Elaborate our ideas

I was standing on the waters edge,what could go wrong?!?!?!?! My sister was urging me into he river...

Let me fill you in! I was in the most beautiful place in New Zealand,Wanaka. My extremely crazy neighbours thought it would be a "great idea" if we went to the nearby swimming hole. Turns out the swimming hole was actually the Clutha River.

So there I was about to jump in, I had seven pairs of beady eyes staring at me,waiting for me to jump.

I could feel the time wasting away.It was late January and it felt like it was 100 degrees.!!! I was really scared and my wetsuit was REALLY uncomfortable!!!

"SPLASH" I finally jumped in.As my head went under the icy cold water,so many thoughts rushed through my head... What if I don't come back up?Why can't I breathe properly? I wonder what we are having for tea???

I came back up "what a rush" I want to jump again and again,but we had to go back to the batch.It turns out we were having fish'n'chips for tea.  

My next step is to make the reader feel like they are there with me.

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